W.A.L.T write an interesting first sentence to hook our reader.My first sentence was "one day there was a boy he was playing a video game" but then i improved it and now my first sentence is."In a small house after school in a gloomy living room a boy was playing a shooting game BANG, BA, BANG the light of the T.V was flashing in his eyes". I think my updated sentence is much more better.
Does my opening sentence hook my readers attention?.
