W.A.L.T write an interesting first sentence to hook our reader.My first sentence was "one day there was a boy he was playing a video game" but then i improved it and now my first sentence is."In a small house after school in a gloomy living room a boy was playing a shooting game BANG, BA, BANG the light of the T.V was flashing in his eyes". I think my updated sentence is much more better.
Does my opening sentence hook my readers attention?.
You have certainly improved the sentence Emily.
ReplyDeleteIt went from boring to WOW!.It's great to see you have used some punctuation.Just remember that because no one is talking you don't need to use speech marks.